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Friday, August 23, 2013

Flaunting Fiction Friday

(This is a short story I shared on my blog in September, 2011.  I thought I would repost it for my new readers.)

She had never done this before.  Oh, she’d thought about it, even dreamed about it, but never really expected it would happen so soon.  “Mother would not approve of this,” she thought.
Of course, Mother needn't know—at least right away.   That was part of the reason Carolyn had spent so much time finding an apartment close enough to her mother’s that visiting her wouldn't be a major hassle, yet far enough away that her mother wouldn't drop by unannounced.

His gorgeous brown eyes had grabbed her attention immediately when she entered the room, and immediately she knew he would be her first.  She pretended not to notice him, and made a concerted effort to appear uninterested, lavishing her attention on others, yet all the while keeping him within her peripheral vision.

Finally, he’d been introduced  to her as Trevor.  For some reason, the name tickled her tongue.  There had never been a Trevor in her life.  He was so handsome, Carolyn felt a little intimidated.   It was almost hard to believe this gorgeous specimen was actually unattached.  His broad shoulders and strong back just seemed to be begging for her tender touch.  After they had exchanged a few lingering glances, she took a seat on the worn leather sofa.  Trevor followed suit, sitting as close to her as was physically possible without sitting in her lap!

She giggled at his brashness; it was as if he knew she was smitten.  With an extreme display of confidence, he kissed her.  Any resistance she might have had melted away with that kiss! 

“Come on, Trevor, let’s get out of here,” she whispered.  Mother’s approval be dammed, she knew she had to take him home with her, now! 

Without any further hesitation, she opened her purse, gave the attendant her debit card, paid the shelter adoption fee, and with his leash in hand, led the beautiful Rottweiler to her car.  On the drive home, Trevor happily rested his head on her lap, and Carolyn knew she had made the right choice for  her first house pet!

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EVA

13 comments:

Chanda said...

Hahaha!! Love it!

Vicki M. Taylor said...

Loved the ending. Great story. Nice twist.

Karin said...

I love the twist ending! Great story, I'm glad you chose to revisit it.

Eva Gallant said...

Chandra: Glad I gave you a chuckle!

Vicki: I like surprise endings.

Karin: Thanks for dropping by; glad you liked it.

fishducky said...

Absolutely loved it--you made me laugh out loud!!

Yamini MacLean said...

Hari OM
oohhh hoooohhhhaawwwwww..... all warm and fuzzy I am now!!! LOVE it Eva!! YAM xxx

The Dose of Reality said...

So cute...especially loved the end! :)-Ashley

Stephen Hayes said...

So well written. Love the twist at the end.

Eva Gallant said...

fishducky: So glad you enjoyed it.

yamini: Glad you're all warm and fuzzy!

Ashley: I thought the twist at the end was fun!

Stephen: Thank you so much for the kind words.

Merlesworld said...

Great story , was mum just not a dog person.
Merle..........

Brian Miller said...

well, i was thinking about something else, but hey if he is house trained he may have a leg up on a man...smiles.

River said...

I got through the second paragraph and straight away thought "puppy!"
I'm pleased I was right. And I'm pleased there was such an instant bond between the two, that's the best way to choose a puppy.

Daniel LaFrance said...

First time visitor by way of BPOTW.

As I read your short story my thoughts wandered, yet skillfully you pulled me back in with a beautiful ending.

Bravo!